Wednesday, August 10, 2016

Tanka Poems




MT Everest

 

Chills went down my spine

My oxygen tank is low

As I stepped in snow

Cold breeze blowing in my face

My shoes stabbing into snow

 

 

Silent Art Auction

Chills went down my spine

I was nervous when speaking

Music was playing

Colourful umbrellas sold

People came to see our art

 

By: Keira
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6 comments:

  1. UnknownAugust 15, 2016 at 7:13 PM

    The Mt Everest poem was cool and it has good rhyming but you repeated snow twice and you could of used a metaphor or simile for it. The silent art auction poem was also very cool and it makes me want to be there!
    Well done!!!
    From Lucca
    Bayfield

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  2. AnonymousAugust 17, 2016 at 7:44 PM

    Hi Keira my name is Sonia.

    I really liked your Mt Everest poem. I love the way you said I felt chills down my spine instead of saying I was cold. I also love the way you said my oxygen tank was low I could just imagine it in my head, you climbing up a mountain out of breath, huffing and puffing as you make your way to the top.

    From Sonia
    http://rangikura-sb-sonia.blogspot.co.nz/

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  3. AnonymousAugust 23, 2016 at 7:24 PM

    Kia orana Ms Rolton,

    I would like to comment on your lovely tank poem, I really love poems and your one is really lovely. I had a read and it was beautiful I really like the sentence that says, “cold breeze blowing in my face”. I had that once and it wasn’t nice at all. I like your post and I am interested in more of your poems.

    Kind regards
    Nav

    http://rangikura-sb-navarone.blogspot.co.nz/

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  4. AnonymousAugust 23, 2016 at 7:29 PM

    Hi Keira, my name is Benjamin.

    I think your tanka poem is brilliant and nice. Your poem made me feel like I was in the medieval time back then. What I actually liked about your poem was when you said that “ Chills went down my spine I was nervous when speaking.”


    Have a nice day.


    Kind regards
    Benjamin
    http://rangikura-cb-room10.blogspot.co.nz/
    http://rangikura-sb-benjamin.blogspot.co.nz/

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  5. AnonymousAugust 30, 2016 at 7:33 PM

    Hello Keira,

    I am Turua from Rangikura School and I think your post is absolutely great. Your poem is very interesting and nice My favourite poem in the post was the Mount Everest poem, it was amazing how you described it, I could really picture it in my mind. I think that it is the best poem I have heard yet, for it is really detailed.

    Kind regards,

    Turua

    http://rangikura-sb-turua.blogspot.co.nz/

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  6. UnknownSeptember 7, 2016 at 3:36 PM

    hi keira,i loved your tanka poems,as myself i love poems and that one was absolutely magnificent.my favorite was the mt everest one, i especialy like the line my oxygen tank is low.
    from Thomas
    Bayfield school http://rimubayfield.blogspot.co.nz/

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